From: owner-shindell-list-digest@smoe.org (shindell-list-digest) To: shindell-list-digest@smoe.org Subject: shindell-list-digest V12 #105 Reply-To: shindell-list@smoe.org Sender: owner-shindell-list-digest@smoe.org Errors-To: owner-shindell-list-digest@smoe.org Precedence: bulk shindell-list-digest Wednesday, January 11 2012 Volume 12 : Number 105 Today's Subjects: ----------------- [RS] Re: You Stay Here - Better rhyme? [Dave McKay Subject: [RS] Re: You Stay Here - Better rhyme? Regarding the SoH version, Chris commented: > Instead of: "Dry your eyes, I'll be alright, I know where they've laid the mines ", > Knightley has put "Dry your eyes, I'll be fine " etc. > > To my mind, a more satisfying rhyme in the most wonderful, chilling song. > > Anyone else agree? Er, no, sorry! The altered line doesn't scan as well. It's not the only partial rhyme in the original either (cf die/bright, coats/road, guns/some, god/not, and, if we're being charitable, wood/enough & bread/kids), so doesn't stand out as an anomaly. Dave. ------------------------------ End of shindell-list-digest V12 #105 ************************************