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Today's Subjects: ----------------- ET: +a tribute to her poh-etry+ [mobilemaRty ] ET: ~easy anonymity~ [shiverflicka ] ET: ~why i got there first~ [shiverflicka ] Re: ET: +a tribute to her poh-etry+ [Brindabella Rattery ] ---------------------------------------------------------------------- Date: Fri, 13 Apr 2001 17:10 +0100 From: mobilemaRty Subject: ET: +a tribute to her poh-etry+ + i've had a faerie good night bed-lamp's light still on nocturnal and late is the hour lustful this moment of joy but not quite the regular fill of toast just even better than the orgasmic to come solely of her poetic magnificence late hours that can only be compared with the ecstacy of her presence around to be spiritually snuggling up to an angel emotionally in a cradle of trust pillowed in her flower bed of poetry + she makes me babies in constellations of words wrapped with innocense childlike beauty and love grows deeper and fonder inside this heart feeling-in those words a little piece of heaven or perhaps the peace of calm or whatever it is the art in between the lines dearest thought-space her mind's mysterious grace that beckons me on "come into the forest and see, my little faerie friend" see here lives the fire-flies let's settle down upon the meadow wear this sheath of lilies abloom once morning rise up to greet the dawn a drop of dew lingering on her lips veils of shivering lust covering slowly upon the dale and the rest is poetry + these beauteous creations that you make, that you give close your eyes love play the scene of the little boy captivated slowing down only in fear of reading too fast (only wanting the pages to last) his heart melting into the afterglow of drinking love in from the ages all twenty-five pages drowsy and heavy with lust just to dream you with me secrets and mysteries unfolds light from a weary night-lamp again fades away and i'll fall asleep just to dream you + i love you, tara* :) ------------------------------ Date: Fri, 13 Apr 2001 09:39:11 -0700 (PDT) From: shiverflicka Subject: ET: ~easy anonymity~ happy easter, glad pask. comments welcomed. shiv + and are you pretty to yourself passing out painkillers to make friends out of computers with people stuck to them i don't know i just go burn my poems she said by shutting off the low and refusing to give in to the recesses i can eliminate any sort of art i can build normality on top of excesses but then you have to be the office chemist to get noticed i said tossing the matches into the bin in favour of getting in you could try there is no context popularity contest i know you cannot win + Get email at your own domain with Yahoo! Mail. http://personal.mail.yahoo.com/ ------------------------------ Date: Fri, 13 Apr 2001 13:53:34 -0700 (PDT) From: shiverflicka Subject: ET: ~why i got there first~ + just because i don't like your packaging that doesn't mean i've written you off as completley unfused and even though i feel more than a little emotionally used and think you're more than a little cognitively confused about what's important i never said you were completely redundant either yes,i may have quoted your father but it was only because it was too much of a bother to constantly think up new criticisms for you myself when you outgrew them so quickly and demanded more than i could possibly remember you know i even had to borrow some of the ones you had given me to put on my shelf reactionary responses to the way you felt the need to whinge about every single imaginary titillating twinge i could never write enough in blue to suit you could i? so in the end i couldn't stomach any of it anymore and even if i had four i still couldn't pour enough pity into a pail miniscule enough to be true to your real amount of anguish because what you spew out is a well-finessed lie so i guess that's what made me want out to have us over and fully finished without anymore weekly-rescinded long-winded good-byes + Get email at your own domain with Yahoo! Mail. http://personal.mail.yahoo.com/ ------------------------------ Date: Sat, 14 Apr 2001 07:38:02 +1000 From: Brindabella Rattery Subject: Re: ET: +a tribute to her poh-etry+ All that I can say is this is beautiful. Your style is very much like mine. I love the way you occasionally rhyme, on purpose? :) I LOVE it!!1 The only this I'd be negative on is the lack of capital letters, fullstops and commas. This is extremely important, I dont know if anyone has noticed how many people don't, but it will make your work appear more professional and thought out! I really hope this helps!!!! Nikki mobilemaRty wrote: > + > > i've had a faerie good night > bed-lamp's light still on > nocturnal and late is the hour > lustful this moment of joy > but not quite the regular fill of toast > just even better than the orgasmic > to come solely of her poetic magnificence > late hours that can only be compared > with the ecstacy of her presence around > to be spiritually snuggling up to an angel > emotionally in a cradle of trust pillowed > in her flower bed > of poetry > > + > > she makes me babies > in constellations of words > wrapped with innocense > childlike beauty and love > grows deeper and fonder > inside this heart > feeling-in those words > a little piece of heaven > or perhaps the peace of calm > or whatever it is > the art > in between the lines > dearest thought-space > her mind's mysterious grace > that beckons me on > "come into the forest and see, > my little faerie friend" > see here lives the fire-flies > let's settle down upon the meadow > wear this sheath of lilies abloom > once morning rise up to greet the dawn > a drop of dew lingering on her lips > veils of shivering lust covering slowly > upon the dale > and the rest is poetry > > + > > these beauteous creations > that you make, that you give > close your eyes love > play the scene > of the little boy captivated > slowing down > only in fear of reading too fast > (only wanting the pages to last) > his heart melting into the afterglow > of drinking love in from the ages > all twenty-five pages > drowsy and heavy with lust > just to dream you with me > secrets and mysteries unfolds > light from a weary night-lamp > again fades away > and i'll fall asleep > just to > dream you > > + > > i love you, tara* :) ------------------------------ Date: Sat, 14 Apr 2001 00:52:09 +0200 From: "Dr. RomeAntic" Subject: Re: ET: +a tribute to her poh-etry+ Hey yall... feels like I've been sleeping for years.... I just had to comment on this... I disagree on extreme importance of capital letters, fullstops and commas. They are just means of forcing (don't mean in a negative way) a rhythm into a poem. But it's not eveything that does that. They are other ways... and then there is a way of letting the reader find their own rhythm. As for it appearing more professional and thought out. I found that the less the thought out poetry is - it's better 9/10 times (within the opus of the same poet). And also I've read professional (highly acclaimed) poetry with much less structure, hell I read prose without those things you mentioned - must I say Ulysses :))... and as far as I know it's very proffesional and thought out as well! So.... I think one should just write however it feels best (at the moment). What's really important is the meaning/message/emotions/atmosphere etc. that can be found in a certain poem... and we should focus on that. - -- Have fun and stay beautiful Dr. RomeAntic, an angel with the worst stroke of luck and a flash of revelation "Have you ever really looked at me Or thought about me secretly Do I make you wonder at all About the speed of light Outside our little world we might not Feel so alone" K's Choice Brindabella Rattery wrote: > All that I can say is this is beautiful. Your > style is very much like mine. I love the way you > occasionally rhyme, on purpose? :) I LOVE it!!1 > > The only this I'd be negative on is the lack of > capital letters, fullstops and commas. This is > extremely important, I dont know if anyone has > noticed how many people don't, but it will make > your work appear more professional and thought > out! > > I really hope this helps!!!! > > Nikki ------------------------------ End of eda-thoughts-digest V4 #55 *********************************